2023年5月SAT真題作文修改實(shí)例
Do people succeed by emphasizing their difference from others?
首先審題,理解成創(chuàng)新類別,也就是讓各位考生寫一個(gè)因?yàn)閯?chuàng)新所以成功的故事。同筆者課上復(fù)習(xí)的這個(gè)題目很類似:Is creativity needed more than ever in the world today? 怎么回答呢?結(jié)合5月考題,自然是需要?jiǎng)?chuàng)造力,因?yàn)橛辛四艹晒Α?/p>
歸納來看,結(jié)合去年下半年的考題,大家會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn),美國考官一直在對(duì)這個(gè)問題進(jìn)行考察。比如去年11月要不要挑戰(zhàn)新想法,你可以寫不要,因?yàn)樾孪敕ň褪莿?chuàng)造力會(huì)讓大家成功。去年12月考要不要挑戰(zhàn)權(quán)威,自然是寫要,挑戰(zhàn)權(quán)威,提出新想法,個(gè)人和社會(huì)才會(huì)更好。再看今年5月份,還是強(qiáng)調(diào)不要從眾,要有自己的個(gè)性。
我給大家找了一篇滿分作文,寫的是失敗到成功的故事,大家可以參考。
This past year, I was auditioning for the fall play, Cat on a Hot Tin Roof. To my detriment I thought it would be a good idea to watch the movie in order to prepare. For two hours I studied Elizabeth Taylors mannerisms, attitude, and diction, hoping I could mimic her performance.
I auditioned for the part of Maggie feeling perfectly confident in my portrayal of Elizabeth Taylor, however, I was unaware that my director saw exactly what I had been thinking. Unfortunately, I didnt get the part, and my director told me that he needed to see Maggie from my perspective, not Elizabeth Taylors.
I learned from this experience, and promised myself I would not try to imitate another actress, in order to create my character.
Persevering, I was anxious to audition for the winter play just two months later. The play was Neil Simons Rumors, and would get the opportunity to play Chris, a sarcastic yet witty role, which would be my final performance in high school. In order to develop my character, I planned out her life just as I thought it should be, gave her the voice I thought was right, and the rest of her character unfolded beautifully from there.
My director told me after the first show that Rumors was the best work hed ever seen from me, and that he was amazed at how Id developed such a believable character.
實(shí)戰(zhàn)演練:接下來我們來做一個(gè)工作,就著這個(gè)素材來寫5月的題目。Do people succeed by emphasizing their difference from others?
大家從題目里面找到兩個(gè)重點(diǎn),一個(gè)是不同,一個(gè)是成功,需要用細(xì)節(jié)去細(xì)化。接下來圍繞這兩個(gè)點(diǎn),結(jié)合例子素材,整出例子的思路鏈條。
例子思路:背景為了成功,看Taylor 的演出,為了做到和她一模一樣失敗安排導(dǎo)演宣布失敗理由痛定思痛準(zhǔn)備下一次演出強(qiáng)調(diào)自己的個(gè)性,按照自己的方式給出這個(gè)覺得的聲音包括表演方式成功
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This past year, I was auditioning for the fall play, Cat on a Hot Tin Roof. To my detriment I thought it would be a good idea to watch a relevant movie starred by Elizabeth Taylor in order to prepare. For two hours I studied her mannerisms, attitude, and diction, hoping I could mimic her performance.
I auditioned for the part of Maggie feeling perfectly confident in my portrayal of Elizabeth Taylor; however, I was unaware that my director saw exactly what I had been thinking. Unfortunately, I didnt get the part, and my director told me that he needed to see Maggie from my perspective, not Elizabeth Taylors.
I learned from this experience, and promised myself I would not try to imitate another actress. Instead, it is imperative to find out my difference, namely, my unique way of acting, in playing a new role.
Persevering, I was anxious to audition for the winter play just two months later. The play was Neil Simons Rumors, and would get the opportunity to play Chris, a sarcastic yet witty role, which would be my final performance in high school. In order to develop my own character, I placed emphasis on originality, planning out her life just as I thought it should be, giving her the voice I thought was right; naturally, the rest of her character was unfolded beautifully from there.
Then I went for another try. After the first show my director told me that Rumors was the best work hed ever seen from me, and that he was amazed at how Id developed such a believable and different character.
Do people succeed by emphasizing their difference from others?
首先審題,理解成創(chuàng)新類別,也就是讓各位考生寫一個(gè)因?yàn)閯?chuàng)新所以成功的故事。同筆者課上復(fù)習(xí)的這個(gè)題目很類似:Is creativity needed more than ever in the world today? 怎么回答呢?結(jié)合5月考題,自然是需要?jiǎng)?chuàng)造力,因?yàn)橛辛四艹晒Α?/p>
歸納來看,結(jié)合去年下半年的考題,大家會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn),美國考官一直在對(duì)這個(gè)問題進(jìn)行考察。比如去年11月要不要挑戰(zhàn)新想法,你可以寫不要,因?yàn)樾孪敕ň褪莿?chuàng)造力會(huì)讓大家成功。去年12月考要不要挑戰(zhàn)權(quán)威,自然是寫要,挑戰(zhàn)權(quán)威,提出新想法,個(gè)人和社會(huì)才會(huì)更好。再看今年5月份,還是強(qiáng)調(diào)不要從眾,要有自己的個(gè)性。
我給大家找了一篇滿分作文,寫的是失敗到成功的故事,大家可以參考。
This past year, I was auditioning for the fall play, Cat on a Hot Tin Roof. To my detriment I thought it would be a good idea to watch the movie in order to prepare. For two hours I studied Elizabeth Taylors mannerisms, attitude, and diction, hoping I could mimic her performance.
I auditioned for the part of Maggie feeling perfectly confident in my portrayal of Elizabeth Taylor, however, I was unaware that my director saw exactly what I had been thinking. Unfortunately, I didnt get the part, and my director told me that he needed to see Maggie from my perspective, not Elizabeth Taylors.
I learned from this experience, and promised myself I would not try to imitate another actress, in order to create my character.
Persevering, I was anxious to audition for the winter play just two months later. The play was Neil Simons Rumors, and would get the opportunity to play Chris, a sarcastic yet witty role, which would be my final performance in high school. In order to develop my character, I planned out her life just as I thought it should be, gave her the voice I thought was right, and the rest of her character unfolded beautifully from there.
My director told me after the first show that Rumors was the best work hed ever seen from me, and that he was amazed at how Id developed such a believable character.
實(shí)戰(zhàn)演練:接下來我們來做一個(gè)工作,就著這個(gè)素材來寫5月的題目。Do people succeed by emphasizing their difference from others?
大家從題目里面找到兩個(gè)重點(diǎn),一個(gè)是不同,一個(gè)是成功,需要用細(xì)節(jié)去細(xì)化。接下來圍繞這兩個(gè)點(diǎn),結(jié)合例子素材,整出例子的思路鏈條。
例子思路:背景為了成功,看Taylor 的演出,為了做到和她一模一樣失敗安排導(dǎo)演宣布失敗理由痛定思痛準(zhǔn)備下一次演出強(qiáng)調(diào)自己的個(gè)性,按照自己的方式給出這個(gè)覺得的聲音包括表演方式成功
修改版:
This past year, I was auditioning for the fall play, Cat on a Hot Tin Roof. To my detriment I thought it would be a good idea to watch a relevant movie starred by Elizabeth Taylor in order to prepare. For two hours I studied her mannerisms, attitude, and diction, hoping I could mimic her performance.
I auditioned for the part of Maggie feeling perfectly confident in my portrayal of Elizabeth Taylor; however, I was unaware that my director saw exactly what I had been thinking. Unfortunately, I didnt get the part, and my director told me that he needed to see Maggie from my perspective, not Elizabeth Taylors.
I learned from this experience, and promised myself I would not try to imitate another actress. Instead, it is imperative to find out my difference, namely, my unique way of acting, in playing a new role.
Persevering, I was anxious to audition for the winter play just two months later. The play was Neil Simons Rumors, and would get the opportunity to play Chris, a sarcastic yet witty role, which would be my final performance in high school. In order to develop my own character, I placed emphasis on originality, planning out her life just as I thought it should be, giving her the voice I thought was right; naturally, the rest of her character was unfolded beautifully from there.
Then I went for another try. After the first show my director told me that Rumors was the best work hed ever seen from me, and that he was amazed at how Id developed such a believable and different character.