2024屆高考英語考前沖刺精品復習講義（北師大版）：寫作（十九）
2024屆高考英語考前沖刺精品復習講義（北師大版）：寫作（十九）
李華在校學習成績很好。他做完作業后喜歡看電視。他的父親不允許他看電視，怕李華會因看電視而影響功課。李華卻不這么認為。
學生習作·外教批改
Li Hua is one of the top students in his school.He likes watching TV，but his fatherdisagrees1 disapproves for fear that it would2 will make his study3 studies suffer.However，Li Hua holds a different view.
He insists that watching TV shouldn’t be banned completely.He thinks4 believes that he won’t get addicted to it.If one5 he can cope_with balance his study studies in_harmony with entertainment in_a_proper_way6 ，his study grades won’t be affected at all.
It is also his belief that TV can even benefit him a lot.It_can_not_only7 Not only can it keep him informed about the8
national and international current affairs，but it can also provide profound knowledge，thus broadening his horizons.
What Li Hua believes is that TV itself is not a bad thing as long as people who watch it don’t abandon themselves to it.Therefore，he intends to have_a_word9 talk with his father to convey his ideas.
,旁 批
1．disagree不能用來描述某人的行為，應該用disapprove(不贊成)。
2．這是真實條件句，因此要用will而不是would。
3．他在學習不止一門學科，因此這里應該用studies而不是study。
4．在本句中，think暗示他不肯定，believe更恰當，可以表示他肯定自己不會沉溺于看電視。
5．one是一個非常正式的詞，現在不常用。如果用one，整個句子其他部分應與其保持一致。由于句子的其余部分都使用了he，那么整個句子應該與he保持一致。
6．這里只要說cope(妥善地處理)就足夠了。如果他妥善處理(copes)，那么就一定是以恰當的方式(the proper way)去做。
7．改過之后的詞序更好，以免與cannot混淆。
8．用the多余。
9．這是一個很好的短語，但是用在這里不太合適，因為何平是晚輩。如果父親和兒子說話用have a word是可以的，但反之就不禮貌。這里可以改寫成He intends to talk with his father...。這是一篇非常優秀的作文。作者完全回答了題目的要求，并且使用了許多對這個程度的學生來說較為復雜的句型結
構和極好的詞匯，如profound，broaden horizons，abandon，intend，harmony，banned，insist等。只是你應該在使用一個單詞之前確定自己理解它的確切 高分作文秘訣之十二：使用正確的標點符號。例如：
Instead of (不要說：)I believe with my hard work my dream to become a biologist will come true.
Use (要說：)I believe，with my hard work，my dream to become a biologist will come true.
Instead of (不要說：)Although I am good at maths.I like English very much.
Use (要說：)Although I am good at maths，I like English very much.
Instead of (不要說：)He is a good-looking tall muscular man.
Use (要說：)He is a good-looking，tall，muscular man.
你所在的城市每年在元宵節夜晚都會舉辦一場大約30分鐘的焰火晚會，耗資達150萬元，市民對此議論紛紛。下表是某報對市民進行調查的結果：不同的觀點
原因
32%贊成
1.推動消費，促進經濟發展2.增加節日氣氛，給市民帶來娛樂
68%不贊成
1.城市建設不完善，需要資金投入2.造成空氣污染，對環境有害
請結合表格內容以“Is it wise to celebrate the Lantern Festival with fireworks？”為題寫一篇120詞左右的英語短文。
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參考范文：
Is it wise to celebrate the Lantern Festival with fireworks?
In my city，there is an annual firework display on the night of the Lantern Festival.The citizens have different opinions about it.
According to a recent survey,32% of the citizens approve of setting off fireworks to celebrate the festival.They say the production of fireworks helps increase consumption and promotes economic growth.And the display offers relaxation and excitement to the citizens，which improves the festival atmosphere.
However，other 68% disagree.For one thing，it’s a waste of money.The firework display lasts only 30 minutes，yet it costs about 1.5 million yuan，which can be used for the city construction.For another，while the fireworks are beautiful to look at，they cause air pollution，which is bad to the environment.
2024屆高考英語考前沖刺精品復習講義（北師大版）：寫作（十九）
李華在校學習成績很好。他做完作業后喜歡看電視。他的父親不允許他看電視，怕李華會因看電視而影響功課。李華卻不這么認為。
學生習作·外教批改
Li Hua is one of the top students in his school.He likes watching TV，but his fatherdisagrees1 disapproves for fear that it would2 will make his study3 studies suffer.However，Li Hua holds a different view.
He insists that watching TV shouldn’t be banned completely.He thinks4 believes that he won’t get addicted to it.If one5 he can cope_with balance his study studies in_harmony with entertainment in_a_proper_way6 ，his study grades won’t be affected at all.
It is also his belief that TV can even benefit him a lot.It_can_not_only7 Not only can it keep him informed about the8
national and international current affairs，but it can also provide profound knowledge，thus broadening his horizons.
What Li Hua believes is that TV itself is not a bad thing as long as people who watch it don’t abandon themselves to it.Therefore，he intends to have_a_word9 talk with his father to convey his ideas.
,旁 批
1．disagree不能用來描述某人的行為，應該用disapprove(不贊成)。
2．這是真實條件句，因此要用will而不是would。
3．他在學習不止一門學科，因此這里應該用studies而不是study。
4．在本句中，think暗示他不肯定，believe更恰當，可以表示他肯定自己不會沉溺于看電視。
5．one是一個非常正式的詞，現在不常用。如果用one，整個句子其他部分應與其保持一致。由于句子的其余部分都使用了he，那么整個句子應該與he保持一致。
6．這里只要說cope(妥善地處理)就足夠了。如果他妥善處理(copes)，那么就一定是以恰當的方式(the proper way)去做。
7．改過之后的詞序更好，以免與cannot混淆。
8．用the多余。
9．這是一個很好的短語，但是用在這里不太合適，因為何平是晚輩。如果父親和兒子說話用have a word是可以的，但反之就不禮貌。這里可以改寫成He intends to talk with his father...。這是一篇非常優秀的作文。作者完全回答了題目的要求，并且使用了許多對這個程度的學生來說較為復雜的句型結
構和極好的詞匯，如profound，broaden horizons，abandon，intend，harmony，banned，insist等。只是你應該在使用一個單詞之前確定自己理解它的確切 高分作文秘訣之十二：使用正確的標點符號。例如：
Instead of (不要說：)I believe with my hard work my dream to become a biologist will come true.
Use (要說：)I believe，with my hard work，my dream to become a biologist will come true.
Instead of (不要說：)Although I am good at maths.I like English very much.
Use (要說：)Although I am good at maths，I like English very much.
Instead of (不要說：)He is a good-looking tall muscular man.
Use (要說：)He is a good-looking，tall，muscular man.
你所在的城市每年在元宵節夜晚都會舉辦一場大約30分鐘的焰火晚會，耗資達150萬元，市民對此議論紛紛。下表是某報對市民進行調查的結果：不同的觀點
原因
32%贊成
1.推動消費，促進經濟發展2.增加節日氣氛，給市民帶來娛樂
68%不贊成
1.城市建設不完善，需要資金投入2.造成空氣污染，對環境有害
請結合表格內容以“Is it wise to celebrate the Lantern Festival with fireworks？”為題寫一篇120詞左右的英語短文。
___________________________________________________________________________
參考范文：
Is it wise to celebrate the Lantern Festival with fireworks?
In my city，there is an annual firework display on the night of the Lantern Festival.The citizens have different opinions about it.
According to a recent survey,32% of the citizens approve of setting off fireworks to celebrate the festival.They say the production of fireworks helps increase consumption and promotes economic growth.And the display offers relaxation and excitement to the citizens，which improves the festival atmosphere.
However，other 68% disagree.For one thing，it’s a waste of money.The firework display lasts only 30 minutes，yet it costs about 1.5 million yuan，which can be used for the city construction.For another，while the fireworks are beautiful to look at，they cause air pollution，which is bad to the environment.
