雅思寫作改錯(cuò)練習(xí)（二）
11 While talking to you, your could-be employers is deciding whether your education, your experience, and other qualifications will pay him to employ you and your wares and abilities must be displayed in an orderly and reasonably connected manner.
12 With economic growth has come centralization: fully 76 percent of Japans 119 million citizens lives in cities which community and the extended family have been abandoned in favor of isolated, tow-generation households.
13 After six months of arguing and final 16 hours of hot parliamentary debates, Australias Northern Territory became the first legal authority in the world to allow doctors to take the lives of incurably ill patients whom wish to die.
14 The great interest in exceptional children shown in public education over the past three decades indicate the strong feeling in our society that all citizens, whatever his special conditions, deserve the opportunity to fully develop their capabilities.
15 Your humor must be relevant with the audience and should help to show them that you are one of them or that you understand their situation and are in sympathy with their point of view.
16 The people who get on in this world are the people who get up and look for circumstances they want, and if they cannot find them, make them. Such is the remark made by Bernard Shaw, a great writer. This view has been shared now by more and more people.
17 The current passion to making children compete against their classmates or against the clock produce a two-layer system, in which competitive A-types seem in some way better than their B type fellows
18 Science moves forward, they say, not so much through the insights of great men of genius as because of more ordinary things like improving techniques and tools.
19 The shareholders as such have no knowledge of the lives, thoughts or needs of the workmen employing by the company in which he hold shares, and his influence on the relations of capital and labor are not good.
20 During the discussion of rock singing verses at last months stockholders meeting, Levin assert that music is not the cause of societys ills and even cited his son, a teacher in the Bronx, New York, who uses rap to communicate with students.
參考答案
11 While talking to you, your could-be employers is deciding whether your education, your experience, and other qualifications will pay him to employ you and your wares and abilities must be displayed in an orderly and reasonably connected manner.
錯(cuò)誤: While talking to you在這里沒錯(cuò)。當(dāng)主句的主語(yǔ)和狀語(yǔ)從句的指代的是同一個(gè)人或物時(shí)，狀語(yǔ)從句的主語(yǔ)可以省略，這就是狀語(yǔ)從句省略結(jié)構(gòu)。your could-be employers is應(yīng)該是your could-be employers are.否則主謂不一致。pay him應(yīng)該是pay him or her.
12 With economic growth has come centralization: fully 76 percent of Japans 119 million citizens lives in cities which community and the extended family have been abandoned in favor of isolated, tow-generation households.
錯(cuò)誤: 119 million citizens lives應(yīng)該是119 million citizens live. 否則主謂不一致。which應(yīng)該是where或in which. which引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句應(yīng)該是一個(gè)不完整的句子，where或in which的后面才能加上一個(gè)完整句
13 After six months of arguing and final 16 hours of hot parliamentary debates, Australias Northern Territory became the first legal authority in the world to allow doctors to take the lives of incurably ill patients whom wish to die.
錯(cuò)誤: whom wish to die應(yīng)該是who wish to die. whom引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句應(yīng)該是一個(gè)不完整的句子，whom在定語(yǔ)從句中只能做賓語(yǔ)。而在who引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句，who既可以做主語(yǔ)，也可以做賓語(yǔ)。
14 The great interest in exceptional children shown in public education over the past three decades indicate the strong feeling in our society that all citizens, whatever his special conditions, deserve the opportunity to fully develop their capabilities.
錯(cuò)誤: Indicate應(yīng)該是indicates.因?yàn)樵摼涞闹髡Z(yǔ)是The great interest。否則主謂不一致。whatever his special conditions應(yīng)該是whatever their special conditions. Their在這里指代all citizens。
15 Your humor must be relevant with the audience and should help to show them that you are one of them or that you understand their situation and are in sympathy with their point of view.
錯(cuò)誤: must be relevant with應(yīng)該是must be relevant to. 介詞搭配不當(dāng).
16 The people who get on in this world are the people who get up and look for circumstances they want, and if they cannot find them, make them. Such is the remark made by Bernard Shaw, a great writer. This view has been shared now by more and more people.
錯(cuò)誤: This view has been shared now應(yīng)該是This view is shared now或者This view is now being shared.已經(jīng)有了明確的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)now，所以這里只能用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)或者現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí)的被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)。
17 The current passion to making children compete against their classmates or against the clock produce a two-layer system, in which competitive A-types seem in some way better than their B type fellows
錯(cuò)誤: The current passion to應(yīng)該是The current passion for. 介詞搭配不當(dāng). produce應(yīng)該是produces，因?yàn)樵摼湓挼闹髡Z(yǔ)是The current passion。否則主謂不一致。
18 Science moves forward, they say, not so much through the insights of great men of genius as because of more ordinary things like improving techniques and tools.
錯(cuò)誤: improving techniques and tools應(yīng)該是improved techniques and tools.用過(guò)去分詞或現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語(yǔ)時(shí)，要注意它們與被修飾名詞的關(guān)系。這里講得是被改進(jìn)過(guò)的技術(shù)和工具，所以應(yīng)該是improved techniques and tools而不是improving techniques and tools。
19 The shareholders as such have no knowledge of the lives, thoughts or needs of the workmen employing by the company in which he hold shares, and his influence on the relations of capital and labor are not good.
錯(cuò)誤: employing by the company應(yīng)該是employed by the company.過(guò)去分詞做后置定語(yǔ)時(shí)，相當(dāng)于一個(gè)省略了的定語(yǔ)從句。所以這里的employed by the company相當(dāng)于who are employed by the company. he hold shares應(yīng)該是they hold shares.因?yàn)檫@里的they指代的是The shareholders。his influence on the relations應(yīng)該是their influences on the relations. Their在這里也是指代The shareholders。
20 During the discussion of rock singing verses at last months stockholders meeting, Levin assert that music is not the cause of societys ills and even cited his son, a teacher in the Bronx, New York, who uses rap to communicate with students.
錯(cuò)誤: and并列連接兩個(gè)謂語(yǔ)，應(yīng)該是平行結(jié)構(gòu)。 assert應(yīng)該是asserted.
11 While talking to you, your could-be employers is deciding whether your education, your experience, and other qualifications will pay him to employ you and your wares and abilities must be displayed in an orderly and reasonably connected manner.
12 With economic growth has come centralization: fully 76 percent of Japans 119 million citizens lives in cities which community and the extended family have been abandoned in favor of isolated, tow-generation households.
13 After six months of arguing and final 16 hours of hot parliamentary debates, Australias Northern Territory became the first legal authority in the world to allow doctors to take the lives of incurably ill patients whom wish to die.
14 The great interest in exceptional children shown in public education over the past three decades indicate the strong feeling in our society that all citizens, whatever his special conditions, deserve the opportunity to fully develop their capabilities.
15 Your humor must be relevant with the audience and should help to show them that you are one of them or that you understand their situation and are in sympathy with their point of view.
16 The people who get on in this world are the people who get up and look for circumstances they want, and if they cannot find them, make them. Such is the remark made by Bernard Shaw, a great writer. This view has been shared now by more and more people.
17 The current passion to making children compete against their classmates or against the clock produce a two-layer system, in which competitive A-types seem in some way better than their B type fellows
18 Science moves forward, they say, not so much through the insights of great men of genius as because of more ordinary things like improving techniques and tools.
19 The shareholders as such have no knowledge of the lives, thoughts or needs of the workmen employing by the company in which he hold shares, and his influence on the relations of capital and labor are not good.
20 During the discussion of rock singing verses at last months stockholders meeting, Levin assert that music is not the cause of societys ills and even cited his son, a teacher in the Bronx, New York, who uses rap to communicate with students.
參考答案
11 While talking to you, your could-be employers is deciding whether your education, your experience, and other qualifications will pay him to employ you and your wares and abilities must be displayed in an orderly and reasonably connected manner.
錯(cuò)誤: While talking to you在這里沒錯(cuò)。當(dāng)主句的主語(yǔ)和狀語(yǔ)從句的指代的是同一個(gè)人或物時(shí)，狀語(yǔ)從句的主語(yǔ)可以省略，這就是狀語(yǔ)從句省略結(jié)構(gòu)。your could-be employers is應(yīng)該是your could-be employers are.否則主謂不一致。pay him應(yīng)該是pay him or her.
12 With economic growth has come centralization: fully 76 percent of Japans 119 million citizens lives in cities which community and the extended family have been abandoned in favor of isolated, tow-generation households.
錯(cuò)誤: 119 million citizens lives應(yīng)該是119 million citizens live. 否則主謂不一致。which應(yīng)該是where或in which. which引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句應(yīng)該是一個(gè)不完整的句子，where或in which的后面才能加上一個(gè)完整句
13 After six months of arguing and final 16 hours of hot parliamentary debates, Australias Northern Territory became the first legal authority in the world to allow doctors to take the lives of incurably ill patients whom wish to die.
錯(cuò)誤: whom wish to die應(yīng)該是who wish to die. whom引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句應(yīng)該是一個(gè)不完整的句子，whom在定語(yǔ)從句中只能做賓語(yǔ)。而在who引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句，who既可以做主語(yǔ)，也可以做賓語(yǔ)。
14 The great interest in exceptional children shown in public education over the past three decades indicate the strong feeling in our society that all citizens, whatever his special conditions, deserve the opportunity to fully develop their capabilities.
錯(cuò)誤: Indicate應(yīng)該是indicates.因?yàn)樵摼涞闹髡Z(yǔ)是The great interest。否則主謂不一致。whatever his special conditions應(yīng)該是whatever their special conditions. Their在這里指代all citizens。
15 Your humor must be relevant with the audience and should help to show them that you are one of them or that you understand their situation and are in sympathy with their point of view.
錯(cuò)誤: must be relevant with應(yīng)該是must be relevant to. 介詞搭配不當(dāng).
16 The people who get on in this world are the people who get up and look for circumstances they want, and if they cannot find them, make them. Such is the remark made by Bernard Shaw, a great writer. This view has been shared now by more and more people.
錯(cuò)誤: This view has been shared now應(yīng)該是This view is shared now或者This view is now being shared.已經(jīng)有了明確的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)now，所以這里只能用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)或者現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí)的被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)。
17 The current passion to making children compete against their classmates or against the clock produce a two-layer system, in which competitive A-types seem in some way better than their B type fellows
錯(cuò)誤: The current passion to應(yīng)該是The current passion for. 介詞搭配不當(dāng). produce應(yīng)該是produces，因?yàn)樵摼湓挼闹髡Z(yǔ)是The current passion。否則主謂不一致。
18 Science moves forward, they say, not so much through the insights of great men of genius as because of more ordinary things like improving techniques and tools.
錯(cuò)誤: improving techniques and tools應(yīng)該是improved techniques and tools.用過(guò)去分詞或現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語(yǔ)時(shí)，要注意它們與被修飾名詞的關(guān)系。這里講得是被改進(jìn)過(guò)的技術(shù)和工具，所以應(yīng)該是improved techniques and tools而不是improving techniques and tools。
19 The shareholders as such have no knowledge of the lives, thoughts or needs of the workmen employing by the company in which he hold shares, and his influence on the relations of capital and labor are not good.
錯(cuò)誤: employing by the company應(yīng)該是employed by the company.過(guò)去分詞做后置定語(yǔ)時(shí)，相當(dāng)于一個(gè)省略了的定語(yǔ)從句。所以這里的employed by the company相當(dāng)于who are employed by the company. he hold shares應(yīng)該是they hold shares.因?yàn)檫@里的they指代的是The shareholders。his influence on the relations應(yīng)該是their influences on the relations. Their在這里也是指代The shareholders。
20 During the discussion of rock singing verses at last months stockholders meeting, Levin assert that music is not the cause of societys ills and even cited his son, a teacher in the Bronx, New York, who uses rap to communicate with students.
錯(cuò)誤: and并列連接兩個(gè)謂語(yǔ)，應(yīng)該是平行結(jié)構(gòu)。 assert應(yīng)該是asserted.
